Hyuga Ryuunosuke

[Yamamoto Katsu]

General Information File

Name:Hyuga Ryuunosuke
(also known as Hyuga Ryuu)

Age:17 1/2

Gender:male

Ninja Rank:Chunin

Ninja Position:

Country:Hi no Kuni

Hidden Village:Konohagakure no sato

Registration #:123128

Date of Birth:Oct. 30

Relatives:Hyuga Clan

Cell Roster:Yamamoto Katsu, Tanaka Hayato

Missions:

S-Rank: 0
A-Rank: 2
B-Rank: 3
C-Rank:18
D-Rank:19

Background:
Academy Student: Went to the Ninja Academy with Katsu and Hayato. Ryuu was one of the people that did not make fun of Katsu. He was taught of the ways of the Byakugan at the age of 8. He activated it a year later. He and his friends graduated when they turned ten except Katsu, who graduated at age 11.

Genin: Ryuunosuke became a Genin at the age of 10. His teammates included Tanaka Hayato and Yamamoto Katsu. Their sensei was Katsu's father, Isamu. Ryuu was glad that his teammates where his friends. He knew that it was not easy to have your friends as your teammates, but it was killer for Ryuu. Ryuu is most likely to become a great ninja. They had many battles and almost been killed twice. Most of their missions where D-C Rank.

Chunin: Ryuu and Hayato failed at thier first Chunin exams. Ryuu trained more than he did going on missions. He also made himself a unique jutsu by using his Byakugan and his taijutsu. He has mastered almost a hundred jutsu in his years as a Chuunin. Most of their missions where C-A rank

Clan Member: Ryuu is one of the Main Hyuuga Clan Members. His uncle taught him the ways of the Byakugan. He trained very hard using the Byakugan. He also trained very hard using the Clan techniques and made some adjustments. In his clan he was called a jutsu genius.

Mental Evaluation File

Mental Analysis: Ryuu is basically a self centered guy, all he wants to do is fight.

Physical Evaluation File

File Photo:

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Height:6'3''

Weight:180

Eyes:Hyuga clan eyes, Byakugan

Hair:long black hair

Distinguishing Features:Medium size cut on left cheek

Attire:Grey Tunic, Clan Symbol on right sleeve, Head Band on head

Chakra Nature:Suiton

Jutsu List:

Personal Inventory

Kunai, Shuriken, Radio, Scrolls, Senbon, Exploding Note, Wire

[chanpuru]

Grammar]
Your grammar is horrendous. Like, really, you need to go read a book on grammar. It makes my eyes hurt when I see these mistakes that often. Spaces after colons please. Capitalize letters after periods, etc. I put this first for a reason. I can tolerate your limited knowledge of Naruto, but not this.

Mission Count]
At your age, it is actually some what impossible for you to have been on that many missions. You would never be able to take an A-rank mission at Chunin, especially since nothing is so special about you that you would go on one. Even so, reduce the number of all those missions.

History]
Take out that stuff about being Hinata's second cousin. You trying to become a closer relative to her than other Hyuga members on the board is silly.

Mental]
Um, can you possible elaborate? I don't understand how someone is hyper yet bored... all in the same moment. Fix that promptly.

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FINAL VERDICT
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To be honest with you, this profile is bad. The grammar is off, your mission count is too high which makes me think you are trying to overpower a mediocre character. The history is dry, even though it is short, and the mental analysis makes me want to eat computer chips. C'mon man, make me want more.

[Yamamoto Katsu]

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and sorry for my grammar, it just is that I suck at English even though I'm born in the U.S.

[Yamamoto Katsu]

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[Yamamoto Katsu]

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